OmegaReploid (2016-07-05 05:58:49)

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One dark and stormy night, There was a battle in a forest, the forest of shadows. Two girls were fighting a mystious robot. “GIVE IT UP!” “You’ll never defeat us.” The two girls shouted. The Robot laughed, his voice sounding human. “HA! You guys are so lame!” Right before one of the girls could think of an insult, Lightning struck a tree, that one of the girls were near. “That maybe your las-“ “LEALA!” the tree landed on Leala. The Robot laughed “THAT'S WHAT YOU GET!” The other girl ran to Leala as she growls “VAVA! THIS ISN’T OVER! I SWEAR TO MY TAIL!!!” The Robot ran off, as the young girl stuggled to save her friend. ONE WEEK LATTER In the Darkness Hunter Base, Rachel, a young monster girl, was trotting around her room, as if she was waiting for something and annoying her two robots, Krystal Foxx and Robopup. Krystal, who was sitting on Rachel’s bed at the time, looked at Rachel then at Robopup, who was laying on the floor, chewing on a toy bone. Krystal grabbed a stuffed rabbit and threw it at Rachel, causing Robopup to jump on Rachel. “AHHHH! KRYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYSSSTTTAAAALLL!!!” a small black Espeon walked into Rachel room and yelled, with a stearn and scary voice “KRYSTAL FOXX AND RACHEL MYERS, SETTLE DOWN!” Immeditly, Krytal, Robopup, and Rachel looked at the Espeon “y-yes, C-commander?” The commander looked at Rachel then calmly said, “Rachel, ‘He’s’ waiting for you” Rachel ran out of her Room, and ran down the hall when she Ran into someone. “Oof!” “Rachel, watch were you’re going!” “Sorry Ma-oh” Rachel stood up and helped Matt up. Rachel’s face turn really red “I’M SO SORRY! I DIDN’T MEAN TO RUN INTO YOU ALTHOUGH I WANTED TO KNOW-““-how Leala was Doing, She’s alright!” Rachel looked at Matt with big eyes. Matt chuckled and said “Its fine Rachel. Although, I was wondering, How did he know where to set you two up, and why did he fled the fight?” Rachel looked away and said “He’s normally a fighter. Did he want leala to get hurt just so that he can fight me?” Matt looked at Rachel and said, softly “Maybe.” Rachel started to walked away when the intercom blared “ALL AVALIBLE HUNTERS, GO TO SECTOR 7B! I REPEAT!” Rachel looked at matt and smiled “Welp I’m-“ “LUMINE! WHERE THE HELL DO YOU THINK YOUR DOING!” Rachel and Matt looked towards the direction of the yell. Lumine, Commander Sigs adopted Sister, ran towards Rachel and Matt. “SOMEONE, CATCH HER!” Sigs yelled. Rachel pounced on lumine and threw her into a wall. Lumine said, weakly “D-don’t try…stopping me! I need to go there!” Matt and Sigs both yelled, at the same time “YOU NEED SOME REST!” Lumine got up and ran off, Rachel chased her. AT 7B When Rachel and Lumine reached Sector 7B, they- (WARNING! THIS SCEANE IS GOREY. I DID THAT JUST TO MAKE A CLIFHANGER MOMENT!) were greeted with a bloody massacre. Blood everywhere, body parts scattered everywhere, and a mystious kid, Waiting to give them a not-so-friendly greeting.
TO BE CONTINUED!

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2016-07-15 18:34:09

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OmegaReploid (2016-07-26 04:27:50)

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Sorry guys, i'm working on chapter 3

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flamez2284 (2016-07-26 04:36:57)

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few spelling errors, very unecessary warning, lots of stuff happening some without explanation. 3/10

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Cass42 (2016-08-09 20:39:23)

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NO! NOT LEALA! OH THE HUMANITY!!

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OmegaZero (2016-10-29 00:35:02)

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OmegaReploid won't be back

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Metro3ds (2016-10-29 00:37:09)

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Carthage (2016-10-30 04:33:11)

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the ing cringe, oh my god

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OmegaZero (2016-10-30 08:51:06)

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Can a mod deleate Carthage's post and lock this thread?

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Carthage (2016-10-30 19:22:52)

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You lock it. You have full control over it.

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2016-10-30 19:23:11

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OmegaZero (2016-11-11 07:45:57)

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I can't. My account was hacked. I'm sorry for being rude. I was having a harsh week

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2016-12-11 05:40:06

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Dorklard (2016-11-24 00:27:45)

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Jesus, Could you cry over criticism anymore? story, author. Alot of unexplained events, No pacing, And a few spelling errors. 1/10.

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