ConnorRonnoc (2013-10-15 16:22:58)

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Not enough detail.

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ConnorRonnoc (2013-10-16 05:45:16)

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This is why I hate fanfics, your character seems to have just dropped in with no backstory, it's too short, and quite frankly, it seems you only made it because you have a crush on Jasmine, who is a video game character.

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