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The Legend of The 7 Power Crystals Chapter 1
Started by MinerShweet
(2013-07-02 04:37:08)
Super_~_Junior. (2013-07-02 06:10:13)
I could obviously tell this is your first, Um. It's really hard to nail a good Alien story without sounding cheesy and like every other story. I give it a 2.4 out of 10/10 for first time stories.. You need to give it more time with the surprises, Just to suck into the story. It's really fast and jumpy. Some stories are good that a short but the kind of story you are doing would fit better if it was a little longer and had a bit more detail.
jEsUs ChRiSt
Super_~_Junior. (2013-07-02 07:41:25)
Short stories aren't spam.
jEsUs ChRiSt
Super_~_Junior. (2013-07-06 09:56:33)
I don't mean to be harsh, But I give this story so far after seeing the other parts a 1.9/10.10.
jEsUs ChRiSt
MeNobody14 (2013-07-06 16:39:58)
^0.1/10.05

Seriously. You need a tutor.
It's time for review, kiddo!
 

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