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The Crime Game Official Series
BeastlySmile (2013-05-16 12:17:37) How it Started 2 show
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MeNobody14 (2013-05-16 19:08:23)This is really good! There are a few errors, but I kind of like the story.
I'm giving this a thumbs up.
It's time for review, kiddo!
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Hiya, my name is Sabrina. I live in a house with my mum and father. I've been very lonely since I'm a only child. It's hard you know- no one to speak with, play, or even see. My parents lock me up in a room every day, just teaching me in the darkness. It's been the same for 5 years. I want someone to play with. I just want someone to play with. I wanted to sneak out of my room to go see a real person. I wanted to do this tonight, once and for all. Night fell, at that moment my parents, turned off their light, I sprang into action. The door, I actually see the door. I twist the knob, and feel the breeze as I openned the door. I had a strange feeling in my stomach by now. I think it was just broccoli. I step outside and feel the floor. I walk slowly to what my parents talk about, the park. I see a child same age as me there. I go up to this child and greeted it. The child looked at me, then screamed. I was confused and tried to hush it down. The parent came rushing over and when he saw me- he grabbed the child and his phone. I saw him dial the numbers: 9-1-1. Why? I soon hear a noise of a loud siren. I feel scared. I run away, seeing a man with a bade saying 'Investigator Daniel'. I saw something on him I could never forget. Never forget. His smile. Curved like a hunter's face when he sees his food. He had this unmistakable scar on his cheek. I ran, hoping to get away from him. Barefoot, I ran to a run-down school house. Daniel had already catched up. I was standing there scared and confused. Why? "Demon girl!" shouted Daniel. "I have found you at last!" I shivered, What? Th last thing I do and see is me falling off of the rail and blacking out.
Police P.O.V
Daniel had just pushed a little girl down. This is a mess. I see- I see the unseeable. This mess, we got to clean this up. They were pretty far up. Blood and guts are everywhere. She fell down hard. We have to hide this. We have to. Continued file in comments.
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